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(Jaden)
    I need to do it! Today is the day, I refuse to put it off any longer! Over the last week or so, I've noticed a number of small, but meaningful, connections have been made between each of my friends and I. It happened naturally; and that's how it should be. I'm closer in friendship with each of them, even Ebony. But still, one in particular seems to find her way not only into my head, but also my heart. Time is my ally. I know it very well. So naturally I know that the time to confess has come. This crush I've had for a while now has a very real possibility of being returned. I still doubt she'd accept a guy like me, but if I don't tell her, my new-found confidence will be for nothing! I gather all four of them in the dorm after class.
    "You're probably all wondering why I've called you here. I won't stall for time, I have to do this while I still have the confidence and courage to do it. I think you all should hear this since it will definitely concern you in some indirect way. So here it is...." I take a deep breathe and look at each of them in turn, then I walk up to the one I want to speak to. "Yolonda Caprico, you've stolen many things over the years, but you always gave them back. But this thing you don't even realize you've stolen, I want you to keep. That 'thing' is my heart! I love you, and whether or not you feel the same, I just need you to know!" I take her hand as she lets out a gasp. "I know I don't deserve you, and I'm ready if you choose to reject me. All I want is to know how you feel."

(Yol)
    He......loves me?! I never say something like THIS coming from a guy like HIM! But I gotta say, it's sweet, and it is exactly what I want to hear. I'm sure now. I know how I feel. Looking into his eyes, that look of determination that says 'I will fight alongside you for the rest of my life if you will let me.' I'm not sure what a normal girl would say in this situation, but I ain't a normal girl, am I? "You sure ya want to make that bet loverboy?" I give him a snarky smirk and he seems a bit confused.
    "Why do you ask? Does this mean what I think it means?!" As he says this, his face lights up into a charming smile that I can't resist smiling back at. I sigh and slowly shake my head.
    "Why do I fall for nerds like you? I may never know. But I'm willing to bet my first love that you can show me the answer. So, what are you gonna do now? I told you that I love you, so wha-" He cut me off mid-sentence with a kiss. Everyone gasped, they hadn't seen our first kiss. So to them, this was it. Man, this guy is actually kinda smooth sometimes. He caught me off-guard. But this just shows that we're on the same page. He knew this is what I wanted, so he went all-in and cashed in the chips. But enough poker puns. I only try to think those up when I'm bored. But this moment....oh this moment, I am NOT bored in the slightest. After several passionate seconds, he breaks the kiss, and I say to him "So THAT is what you were gonna do about it.... I approve. But don't try to rush anything between us. I want this to last!" I grab his face with both hands and kiss him almost aggressively. "Who's caught off-guard now?" I giggle at his dumb-looking face, but the suddenness of the kiss soon wears off and he just smiles at me warmly.
    "Huh, I don't think I've ever heard you giggle like a love-struck schoolgirl before." he says.
    "Aw, shut up, ya jerk. You know that's pretty much exactly what I am, right?" We all start laughing and the mood of the dorm becomes a lot less tense. I'm happier than I've ever been before, but I have appearances to keep up. I ain't the girly-girl type. We walk hand-in-hand down the hall to our next class together.

(Azzy)
    "Well, that just happened." I say with a shrug. "I had my doubts, but I think they'll be a great couple. I trust him to treat her right." I guess what I felt was just a greater bond of friendship or something. He made his choice, and I'm not bitter about it, so it probably wasn't love to begin with. So whatever, they'll be a good couple I'm sure.

(Morgan)
    "Hmm, well, I'm still happy we can all be friends. And that's what's important. He won't forget about us, we know each other well. And he wanted us to know so that we could all be happy for them. This won't affect our teamwork now that we know about it. He made the right decision." I guess it was just a greater bond of friendship I felt, but it was a good feeling, and this is a good feeling too! I'm happy for my friends.

(Ebony)
    "Ah, young love, isn't it glorious? I like seeing couples like them get together. They make a cute pair! Well, you two should be getting to the next class as well. Hurry along now!" I'm glad it turned out this way. I don't think I was falling in love with him, I guess I just gained a greater respect for him and am proud of his achievements. It's good to see those two become an item. I'm sure they'll have lots of fun together. Now just to find myself a man... All in due time Ebony, all in due time.... I should get going too, I have business  to attend to after all. A teacher's work if never truly done! The Vytel Festival's students from the other kingdoms will be arriving soon and I need to change into my airship stewardess outfit.
Team MAYJ: Part 13- A Confident Confession
This marks the end of the first story arc. The second will involve a bit more action and introduce some new characters. Obviously the winner of the poll was Yol, by almost unanimous results! One vote for Morgan was the only outlier. But now there is still one new question that I want you to decide: Should Ebony get a boyfriend in the second arc from a different kingdom? Feel free to design the character if you want too! I'll give full credit. I'll just need a character bio to reference if you do decide to create one. A simple yes or no from basically anyone who regularly reads these, and I'll act accordingly. If yes with no design, I'll try to think of something. 

Thanks for reading, I hope you enjoyed this and of course, HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY!!!! :heart:
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(Jaden)
    "And....there you go! All set. Try not to move it too much and it should heal up nicely." I say to the little boy with the fractured wrist. He thanks me and runs back to his family who are waiting outside the medical tent. I hear a familiar giggle behind me and turn around to see who is there. It's ebony.
    "Hey there Jaden! So, how do you like my outfit?" She is dressed in a nurse outfit. Very cute, but still modest. I've never imagined that she'd be one to cosplay, even as a generic nurse. But I guess she just likes playing dress-up or something.
    "I think it looks cute on you. In a mature, elegant sort of way though. You know what I mean, right?" She seems pleased with my answer, but I'm not sure how to respond to the look she gives me. It's almost....flirtatious. At least I think so anyway. But I can't afford to act in kind to that given our relationship of student and teacher. But I can't help thinking she is quite young and beautiful nonetheless. I just give her an awkward smile and tell the next person to come in for treatment.
    "Umm.....h-hello. Are you perhaps the person taking care of the wounded?" She asks me in a shy voice that seems a little frightened. A girl of about 16 cautiously walks forward, her ears drooping nervously and her tail between her legs. I tell her not to be afraid and calmly ask her to sit down and tell me what the problem is. She sees Ebony and seems to relax a bit. "I'm sorry sir, I'm just not very......comfortable around human men. I'm sure you're nice, but it's just something that happened in my past." I slowly put a hand on her shoulder and she seems to relax a bit.
    "You don't need to tell me, I'm only here to help you feel less pain from your injury. Simply tell me where it hurts and I'll see what I can do." She smiles gently before nervously turning around and lifting the back of her shirt to reveal a large claw-mark clearly left by a Grimm. I calm down upon realizing what she is doing, and pick up the bandages. I begin wrapping them around her stomach and look over to Ebony. "I'll need a bit of assistance here, we don't want anything uncomfortable to happen while doing this, so I think it would be best if you do the rest for her." She breathes a sigh of relief and says thanks. I've been in similar situations, but I'm getting used to these sorts of things. Living in a dorm with three girls has probably caused me to gain a sense of gentlemanly instinct as a necessity.
    "Okay, just hold still and I'll finish patching you up. You know, you should be glad to have such a caring young man taking care of you. He's obviously trying to respect your privacy by letting me wrap the bandages around your chest instead. Most boys his age would do something 'accidentally' in order to cop a feel, but not Jaden! HE is a gentleman." I hear her words, but I don't turn around or respond. I'll just take the compliments and ignore her teasing. I've gotten much worse from Yol after all! I think I might actually be starting to get on her  level. Next time she tries to mess with me, I'll just joke right back at her. Man, everyone in my team is just so keen on making me feel embarrassed lately.

(Azzy)
    I give the old lady her medicine and ask the next person to come in. I like helping people. And my knowledge of different faunus is growing with this experience as well. One guy did try to flirt with me, but what else is new?
    At least he was nicer about it than that pompous, hairy-faced weirdo at Beacon. I know it must be because of the sort of faunus he is, but does he REALLY need to have his goatee curled up like that? I don't remember his name, but that's probably just because I don't care what it is. When we get back to Beacon, he better not ask me out to the upcoming dance once the other kingdom's students arrive for the Vytel Festival!
    Ebony appears along with the next patient, a small child with a lollipop. I ask her if she gave it to him and she said "Yes, but he just looks so innocent and cute! He was sad and asked if 'the nice lady' would give him a lollipop after he got his shot. I told him you didn't have any and he asked me why. It was just TOO CUTE!!" I frown at her childish reaction as she knelt down and hugged the little boy from behind. I heave a sigh and tell him to hop up in the seat and relax.
    "You have nothing to worry about young man, I'm an expert with needles. Even my weapon uses them, it's really cool!" I see his face light up with excitement hearing about it and I can't help but smile at the innocent joy on his face. He still looks a bit afraid, but I guess Ebony's nurse outfit compared to my lab coat and swimsuit would inspire less confidence in me. Nevertheless, he closes his eyes and lets me give him the shot like a good little boy. "All done, you did great! Now you won't be sick with any bad diseases for another year!" I give him a sweet smile and he thanks me before running off to play with some other children. Seeing him makes me feel a bit sad....

(Ebony)
    We eat some lunch and I help Morgan cook him while dressed like a chef. I like wearing costumes like this, it's fun and makes me feel pretty. I have a bunch in my wardrobe, but my favorite is the evening gown I'll be wearing to the upcoming dance. It's not exactly a costume, but to me everything other than my normal attire counts. Because it makes me feel pretty. I remember when I was younger. I was kind of chubby and no one really teased me about it, but it wasn't easy for a female panda faunus to stay in shape. We have been known to be on the heavy side due to our animal traits. But over the years of being a Huntress-in-training here in Menagerie, I found some great ways to exercise and eat healthy. The salt-shakers of bamboo flakes have helped more than anything of course.
    Returning to the ship later that day, we head back to Beacon and say good-bye to Menagerie's remaining faunus. It will be a while before they start to bring more of them to the other kingdoms, but for now Vale is their best place to be sent. And best of all, I used my ambassador-status to pull some strings and have yhat adorable little boy and his family sent to live in Vale! He's such a cutie-pie! His name is Pierre and his little fox ears are so soft! I missed being around faunus like him! You don't see many faunus children outside of Menagerie these days.....for good reason of course. There are a lot of humans who would tease them, both young and old.
    I wonder if Jaden really liked my nurse outfit. It might be bad to act in such a way with a student, but I can't help liking to strut my stuff while wearing those cute costumes!
Team MAYJ: Part 12- Bearing Witness (Second Half)
In this part of the filler-episode one, I decided to include a bit more of Ebony's playful and cute side. I also included a bit of backstory about her childhood. The next part will be the one where Jaden confesses his love for one of his friends(because Ebony is a choice, even though she isn't on their team. But his teammates are also his friends of course). Who will it be? YOU decide! 

I also would like to mention that I recently learned better paragraph structuring thanks to someone who mentioned me in a journal they made about walls of text. Not exactly flattering to be the sole example they had, but at least I was memorable for SOMETHING, right? XD
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I just saw RWBY volume 3 episode 11. And I can't believe some of the stuff that happened! Velvet's weapon was finally revealed and it was EPIC!!! I won't spoil anything, but just know that some very interesting things happen! Anyone who wants to talk about it, I'd love to discuss it with! But I'll see about that later. I need to watch some reaction videos to that!! I wonder what will happen in episode 12?! :eager:
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  • Watching: Higurashi No Naku Koro Ni Rei
  • Playing: Animal Crossing: New Leaf
  • Eating: barbecue-flavored potato chips
(Azzy)
    "Aaawwwww.....I wanted to go on that mission with Dr. Ooblek! C'mon guys, he's cool, trust me!" I didn't think they were going to agree easily, but it was worth a shot. I sigh and say "Fine then. But who ARE we going with? Do you even know yet Morgan?" I give her a slightly annoyed look and yet she doesn't seem fazed at all. Suddenly someone steps out from behind Morgan. It's Ebony.

(Ebony)
    "That would be me Azzy." I proudly puff out my chest and say "Have you forgotten that I was a Huntress too? Ozpin even made it official when he hired me. Do you need to see the documents? Because I have them all neatly filed away." She just waved away my comment and reluctantly went with us. "So where are we going anyway?" she asks. I allow Morgan to explain. "We're going to provide aid to faunus in Menagerie. Although most of them have been released, the process is slow and they aren't being given the right care while waiting. So today it is our job to help the injured, care for the sick, feed the people, and protect the village from Grimm. Each of us will do one of those things, and our friend/mentor here will oversee our progress and check on each of us periodically. So now we decide who does what." After Morgan's explanation, I offer that we draw lots to see who gets which job. But it gets ignored as they instead decide to call dibs on the jobs. "I call dibs on the Grimm hunting!" shouts Yol. "I am probably the only person qualified for one of the health-related options, so give me one of those." says Azzy. "Jaden, what about you? I'll just do whatever is left after you pick" said Morgan.
    He thinks about it shortly and eventually says "Alright, I'll take the injured. I probably have enough experience with pain to know what I'm doing...." That logic seems a bit off, but I let it go. He won't be doing anything too far outside common knowledge care after all. First-aid is not difficult to learn even if he isn't already good at it. "So that leaves Morgan with the job of feeding people. You know how to cook, right?" She looks at me with a smile and says jokingly "I dunno, why don't you ask my GIANT KITCHEN KNIFE WEAPON?" She then takes out Orchard Pear and bursts out in laughter. Then the others join in. I can't help giggling a bit myself. It feels good to have friends even if they are students. It makes me feel worthy of my occupation.
    We soon land in Menagerie after a long flight. I step out first and say with my arms stretched out wide "Welcome to the jungle country known as Menagerie! Also know as my birthplace!" They all seem stunned. ""Woah! Preeeeettttyyyy!" says Morgan with a look similar to a child seeing fireworks for the first time. Yol seems a bit less impressed, but I know her well enough to know that she's just trying to look cool and aloof. "Meh, I've seen better." She comments, unable to keep a smile off her face. Jaden just looks astounded and Azzy probably isn't that impressed. I wouldn't be surprised if she'd been here before. "Well, I must admit, it IS a nice-looking place. Too bad it was being treated as a prison more than a possible vacation destination...."

(Morgan)
    A few hours pass as we split up to go to each of the tents set up for each service. Ebony goes with me first. She leans in and asks me "Can I talk to you about something in private, at least private from your team anyway.... Well maybe you can let Yol know if you think it would interest her. Anyway, how would you feel about being recruited into The White Fang? We use peaceful methods to increase the speed of the Faunus Rights Movement. But we need more help, more signatures on the petitions from non-faunus people, more heads in the crowds in the protests, more capable faunus women like yourself to be a good image for our cause. And also a cute face that can bring people together." I look at her confusedly before saying "And that cute face is....me?" I am not quite sure how to process what she says next. "Not exactly....you would be more like the heroic example of the good we can do. We need someone who is much less.....intimidating. Please understand! You will gain respect and admiration, but the mascot role is simply better suited to a child perhaps." I consider what she said and reply "Will we both still be at Beacon?" She nods vigorously. "Oh yeah. We definitely will be! This will all happen after your graduation.". I accept her offer and she leaves me to check on Yol.

(Yol)
    "Hey, teach, do you know if Jaden has been making googly eyes at anyone lately?" I need to know. Not sure if it is curiosity or what, but I just gotta know. She says "Not that I know of, why? Have you noticed that happening?" I say no a bit too quickly to seem casual, but she doesn't seem to notice. I continue while looking out for Grimm. "I think he just might have a crush on someone, but I ain't sure who. I'm thinking it just might even be me!" Ebony giggles and says "Well, maybe it is! You ARE a charming and interesting young lady after all! He wouldn't be into someone older, like me..." I look back at her and see she has a wistful look on her face, so I comfort her. "No, no, that isn't true! You ain't old! You might as well be only a few years older than me! And I'm the youngest member on my team! C'mon, how old ARE you? I guarantee you don't look a day over 21!" She smiles and says that she's actually 28. I honestly didn't think she was that old. She really does look pretty and youthful. "Hell even I might date ya if no one else does!" I laugh lightly, but she seems to find it much funnier somehow. It's good to see her in high spirits. I just sort of wish a Grimm would come just so I wasn't standing out her staring into the trees and being bored.... Maybe I should have gone with the feeding people. I CAN bake pretty well after all! I hope the lunch break is soon.
Team MAYJ: Part 12- Bearing Witness (First Half)
This is sort of a filler episode kind of thing. Just something to do while I wait for Valentine's Day and the real story continues. I will probably make the next part in a few days. Thanks for reading. :)
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(Ebony)
    Today I'm taking some time to help out a student I've been worried about lately. His semblance is a danger to his life if the fight gets too intense. He changes when it activates, his personality isn't exactly different than who he is, but it is more like a reckless state of mind. He starts using psychology to keep his foe right where he wants them. But it is a very dangerous way of winning. People are unpredictable, especially when confused or threatened. I need to find a way to help him gain better control over his semblance. Jaden might not live long as a Huntsman if he doesn't.
    I approach him after class and ask him to come with me to the combat arena. Goodwitch is standing by to keep track of what is happening. I've been working on this for a while now and it just might work. "So, what I've brought you here for is to try out something I want you to incorporate into your strategies. This is something I made with the help of your teammates over the course of a week or so." I hand him the small chip and he examines it before inserting it into his SIM Watch. "All I ask is that you practice using it to help you control your semblance." Upon hearing mention of his semblance, he seems slightly frightened. It's clear he doesn't want to use it at all if possible. But I see potential for something greater within the known data on how it works.
    We take up our fighting stances and he activates the time manipulation functions on himself. He also activates the new addition. "Semblance Stabilizer, activate!" He can now use his semblance right from the beginning before taking any damage at all. The function also allows him to use his time manipulation to make the effect last longer and himself move faster. Now for the real test of it.... I attack with all I've got unarmed and allow my natural strength to repeatedly hit him. He blocks without using his shield and stops every hit. Each hit with the force I use would usually break his bones without his aura. But this new function also powers up his aura's natural healing power. But anything above a broken bone it will not help against. "I think it's working!" He shouts. My attacks get weaker and I eventually get too tired to keep attacking. The way it helps bolster his aura is by sapping some of the force behind the hit. His aura will drain by taking damage at the same rate as usual, it only increases the power of natural healing.
    I tell him to wait for it to wear off and to deactivate all functions other than the Semblance Stabilizer. He looks very afraid, bracing himself mentally for the onslaught of pain he would usually feel. "Get ready, but trust in me. I wouldn't do all of this for you if I didn't care for your safety. I'm still sorry for what will happen regardless. Just know it could be worse and hold your determination to not surrender to the pain." I reassure him, but despite that, I can't help but feel agonizing guilt for putting him through this. I really do care, more than I probably should, about him in particular.
    It finally happens after a few more seconds and he drops to his hands and knees but suppresses a scream. He's not letting the pain control him. He struggles to his feet and amazingly, he grits his teeth and manages to smile triumphantly. He made it past the hardest part of the recovery period that his semblance hits him with by wearing off. This is the last thing the new function does....gradual pain return. It hits him, but a little at a time. So as long as he can stand up on his own after reaching the peak of the agony he will be able to power through it. He looks at me with a face of pride and slight over-confidence before saying "This semblance does not make me weak, I make myself stronger!" Something about him saying that, with such a determined expression of triumph makes me feel my cheeks blush and my heart race. Could this really be what I think it is? Maybe it's pride that my hard work paid off, maybe it's a feeling of sheer happiness that he will be just fine from now on, or maybe it is the feeling of ecstasy a woman feels when they see their knight in shining armor standing valiantly triumphant. Am I perhaps.....in love? No! I can't afford to fall in love with a student. But this other side to him, so confident, so strong-willed, so easily smiling whilst being in otherwise maddening levels of pain... I like it. I guess it could just be that I want that side of him to be his only side.
    "I've always told you, a man is only as strong as his will to fight for what he holds dear. And life itself is definitely a cause worth conquering your own restraints for. Congratulations on increasing your tolerance and powering through your biggest weakness. I must say, you did look quite noble there standing up despite your injuries. Give it time and it will fully subside. You'll be right as rain again in a matter of minutes!" Goodwitch leaves to report the data collected from our little experiment and we are now alone. Jaden sits down slowly against the wall to wait out the rest of his recovery. He should already be able to walk again by now, but he deserves the rest and it will help the process. He speaks to me saying "Thanks. Thanks so much for this. Without your help, I might have never gained the level of confidence I feel now. It wouldn't be a stretch to say that you changed my life just now...." He smiles warmly and sighs with relief that he will be able to handle his semblance from now on. The more he uses this system, the stronger he will naturally become so he might one day not even need it anymore. I reply "Don't thank just me, your teammates were large parts in the creation of this. Morgan's clever ideas, Azzy's knowledge of the human body, and even Yol's emotional support that allowed me to stick it out to the end and finish it.
    I want to tell him about that feeling I got, but I'm still not entirely sure what caused it yet. But the way he is looking at me right now is also a bit confusing to read. I'll just go out on a limb and say it is happiness and he is thinking about someone he wants to use this new-found strength to protect and fight alongside. He did always seem like the romantic type to me after all. But now we go our separate ways and he walks back to the dorm, a brand new confidence visible in every stride. I'm proud of him, no doubt about that at least!
Team MAYJ: Part 11- A Fight Filled With Feeling?
This is the last "bonding" part where Jaden has an experience with one of the girls who happen to surround him that might end in romance. But that isn't for me to decide on. No! YOU, the reader(s), get to decide who he belongs with. all four girls are viable options and he definitely has a crush on SOMEONE. But who will it be? On Valentine's Day that will be revealed. To vote for who you want it to be, or even just to offer a random pick to help me out with deciding, see this journal entry: snowjoe72.deviantart.com/journ…

Thanks for reading, and I hope to see you participate in the voting. :)
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I just saw RWBY volume 3 episode 11. And I can't believe some of the stuff that happened! Velvet's weapon was finally revealed and it was EPIC!!! I won't spoil anything, but just know that some very interesting things happen! Anyone who wants to talk about it, I'd love to discuss it with! But I'll see about that later. I need to watch some reaction videos to that!! I wonder what will happen in episode 12?! :eager:
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CoronaKasai Featured By Owner 6 days ago
Hey, did you get a chance to read the latest part I wrote? Sorry if I'm being buggy on it
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snowjoe72 Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I just couldn't think of anything I wanted to say at the time. I guess the best thing I can think of now would just be "I wonder what will happen next." There was a good fight scene and all, but the way it was written made the main focus of attention be on the following part just because you want to know what this part's events will cause to happen. It goes without saying that I had read it. Even if you ask me if I read it before I read it, I will still have read it already. Deviations appear higher in the message list than replies or comments. So by the time I see you asked me bout it, I will have already read it. So you don't even need to ask. And I try to leave meaningful comments whenever I can think of one. So I just didn't want to leave something you've heard a million times like only "Great job" or "I liked it". Comments like that don't get the point across and worse, don't guarantee that someone even read the thing. I don't blame you for asking, but you should know by now that I'm interested in your story and therefore would definitely read it. :)
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CoronaKasai Featured By Owner 6 days ago
Yeah, it was actually very difficult to put the next part was gonna focus on Aero might still. I kind of liked it when I made Nya act like she didn't kick Robin and pretended he just fell over. Could've been something she picked up with Silver and never realized it.

I actually have hardly gotten comments before you and a couple others started watching me. And alright, your right, I should know.
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snowjoe72 Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry if some of those sentences were confusing.... The English language is annoying sometimes. The present tense and past tense of read are spelled the same way, so it probably got confusing figuring out which tense I meant at what time. ^^;
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Spread the DA love around! (you can copy and paste this message on their userpage!)

RULES:
1- You can hug the person who hugged you!
2- You -MUST- hug 10 other people, at least!
3- You should hug them in public! Paste it on their page!
4- Random hugs are perfectly okay! (and sweet)
5- You should most definitely get started hugging right away!
Send This To All Your Friends, And Me If I Am 1.
If You Get 7 Back You Are Loved!
1-3 you're bad friend
4-6 you're an ok friend
7-9 you're a good friend
10-& Up you're loved
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snowjoe72 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
I don't do tags, And I'm pretty sure this qualifies. I thank you for the sentiment, but I'm just not doing the tag stuff. 

Please have this as a consolation: :hug:
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Kimilicious01 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
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At least we're friends! ^u^
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snowjoe72 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly! :)
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Kimilicious01 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the watch!! ^u^
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snowjoe72 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
No problem. Your art is great, so naturally I'd like to see more of it. :)
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